Round Three of My Elevator Pitch
Here is the link to my third pitch on the "EZ-Clean Hydro Bottle":
Elevator Pitch #3
Reflection on Feedback
This time around I had five comments on my elevator pitch. After reading and analyzing all of the comments, I couldn't dissect any piece of constructive advice from them. Everyone had really positive things to say about the changes that I made, so I'm going to make sure I maintain those improvements for this video. Once again I'm going to make sure I incorporate lively tone and voice inflection to ensure the audience perceives my passion. I'm also going to make the lighting and quality of the video are good so I don't distract the audience from the content of my pitch.
In the spirit of reflection, recording my elevator pitch the third time around was soooooo much easier than the first and even second time. Dr. Pryor was right when said we'd be more comfortable in front of the camera and I feel like my pitch is truly much improved.
What Did I Change?
Not too much has changed from my last pitch. It was a little difficult to think of ways to fine-tune my pitch because I didn't receive any constructive feedback (I can't complain but it doesn't necessarily help for the purpose of this part of the assignment). The best thing I could think of is to change up my camera angle so it looks like the camera is eye-level, although this is hard because I'm pretty tall and we have to stand. I know the pixel quality of the video isn't ideal but it's the best I could do given my current situation. Lastly, as stated before I'll try even harder this time to use meaningful gestures and emotions while I talk.
Hi Jordan,
ReplyDeleteIts pretty cool that you didn't have many critiques to go off of because that means your pitch must have been pretty great! I do think you seem very relaxed ad comfortable in this pitch which is a perk of doing it a third time. Much like your last pitch, you are very clear about what you have to offer and why everyone needs it. You're able to be very factual but persuading at the same time which is great. I appreciate the fact that although you didn't have many critiques, you were able to make self improvements to your pitch.
Thanks!
Holly Dixon
Hello Jordan! I personally watched your last pitch and I enjoyed it and did not see any major ways to improve it. The change of camera angle made a difference and you had good lighting in your pitch. Overall, you did a great job of convincing why your product is worth purchasing and you did a great job of keeping the listeners attention throughout with your tone and speed of which you were talking. Great job!
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