My second elevator pitch for the "EZ-Clean Hydro Bottle" is attached in the following link:
Elevator Pitch #2
Reflection on Previous Pitch's Feedback
Out of the three comments on my previous post, only one of them had criticism. They said to use more meaningful hand gestures or to just put my hands down by my side. I don't think putting my hands down by my side is a good idea in general for public speaking, however, I tried to use better body language this time around. I also tried to put more emotion and passion into my tone when giving the pitch because last time around I was a little bit monotone.
What Did I Change?
For my second elevator pitch, I tried to infuse more liveliness into the pitch. I did this by incorporating stronger body language, facial expression, and more inflection in my presentation. Also, I changed up my background to improve the lighting of the video.
Hi Jordan,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your pitch. You still did a great job thoroughly explaining what your product has to offer, and you reminded me of why my current product is not good enough. I think you took good consideration of your previous comments by using more meaningful gestures, and incorporating meaningful vocal inflections.
Thank you!
Holly Dixon
Hi there Jordan,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your second elevator pitch, and I am so glad you took the time to perfect from your first one. It seems like you looked back at your old pitch and dissected it to find out what you might be able to do better, and I really respect and appreciate the time and effort you put into this.
Hey Jordan,
ReplyDeleteI think this was a very good addition to your previous elevator pitch and you seemed to be more enthusiastic with more meaningful gestures. I like that you brought a water bottle where the neck was too small so viewers could really get a full understanding of what you mean when you say it's hard for people to wash. Good job man!
Hey Jordan!
ReplyDeleteI think this elevator pitch was an improvement from your first because you did a great job being more enthusiastic. Your change of energy convinced me more that this product was useful to me and I would actually consider purchasing it now. Like stated last time, I like how you have an actual water bottle in hand because it is a great way to sell your product if you show it as you speak. Great job!
Hi Jordan,
ReplyDeleteI can definitely see the difference in the use of body language and tone this time around in your elevator pitch. While your last elevator pitch was a bit hum drum this one caught my attention much better and left me interested in what you had to say on your product. I think you presented your product effectively and persuasively and have nothing to say but great job!